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This feeling
Is haunting me.
This feeling
Of jealousy.
This pain,
Here inside,
Is impossible
To hide.

I walk along the street
At night.
Terrifying all
In sight,
For I hold a knife
In my right
To rid this feeling of mine.

I enter her room,
My face holds a smirk.
I know now it’s my turn
To be the one that lurks.
I approach her bedside
Readying the knife.
If I didn’t feel this way,
I’d never take her life.

This feeling
Is haunting me.
This feeling
Of jealousy.
This pain,
Here inside,
Is impossible
To hide.

I strike her only once,
Or twice,
A simple thought and act
Of vice.
She would have to pay
The price
For taking this love of mine.

I do not care
If anyone discovers
What had happened
To my love’s lover.
I drop the knife
And flee from there,
Grinning and laughing,
As the wind blows my hair.

That feeling
Was haunting me.
That feeling
Of jealousy.
That pain
Here inside
Was impossible
To hide.
©2005-2009 ~AbandonedAngel
:iconabandonedangel:

Author's Comments

.....And now, I present to you....the horrific, violent, and agonized portion of my mind! *gasp* Yeah, this is what I was hesitant to write. I would never hurt anyone. A life is worth too much to take away. I just happen to be listening to the American McGee's Alice soundtrack. XD lol. so yeah. Hope this doesn't surprise anyone too much. >>;
I tried to make it lyrical, but I guess I'm more of a poet than a lyrics writer. heh ^^;

I give permission to :iconpoes-blood: to use this piece in their gallery.

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:iconglarawen:
Bloody hell, the flow and rhyme in the is perfect! :XD: I know what you mean about your life being too much to hurt someone. Dammit, why can't those laws change so I can go mangle some chick's face!!

Only kidding.

I think ...

The poem ....

It's damn great! As always. This jealousy topic of yours is pushing my mind in circles. It's in overdrive now. Don't worry, that's a good thing. Always good if you can make a reader think! Love the poem!!

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Fuck me harder. No harder. Make me cry.
:iconabandonedangel:
Thanks. Yeah. hehe ;P >>;
Thanks so much for this comment. Makes me feel really good about my writing. :glomp:

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What if I'm the kindest demon? Something you may not believe in.
:icontheoccasionalpoet:
Very nice flow. The emotion and jealousy of the narrator comes across extremely clearly which is really awesome if a writer can accomplish it. And I love the ending of the poem. Simple, yet creepy and almost a feeling of relief now that that feeling has gone by killing someone. Very creepy. Awesome job.


~theoccasionalpoet
:iconabandonedangel:
Thanks so much. Exactly what I was going for. ^__^ Also, thanks for the watch and fave.

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What if I'm the kindest demon? Something you may not believe in.
:iconmarioprince:
Outstanding job on this piece. Word choice and flow were excellent. A must :+fav:

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"Even in our sleep, pain which cannot forget falls drop by drop upon the heart, until, in our own despair, against our will, comes wisdom through the...grace of God."
~Æschylus, Greek Playwrite & Poet
:iconabandonedangel:
yay! thank you. :glomp:

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What if I'm the kindest demon? Something you may not believe in.
:icontheoccasionalpoet:
No prob. You're very good. If you wanna look at some of my poems anytime, especially The Knife, I'd enjoy knowing what you think. It also has to do with death, but through suicide. Thanks.


~theoccasionalpoet
:iconmarioprince:
You're welcome.

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"Even in our sleep, pain which cannot forget falls drop by drop upon the heart, until, in our own despair, against our will, comes wisdom through the...grace of God."
~Æschylus, Greek Playwrite & Poet
:iconabandonedangel:
Ah. Okay. I'll check when I have time. ^_^

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What if I'm the kindest demon? Something you may not believe in.

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